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Date: 2012-08-22 09:08 am (UTC)
azalee_calypso: (pkmn n)
Oooh, I liked this. The premise and your construction of magic is really interesting; to be honest, there were more than a few clumsy sentences (some parts feeling too much like simple descriptions without bringing anything new) and I think a few grammatical errors, but all this means is that you have room to improve, you must keep writing even more! \O/ And woah, I just physically recoiled in horror at the basket ball thing. And this is because you did such a great job at depicting how important magic is to Hilda. The ending is appropriately epic, I loved the part where she finally unleashes the magic. Well done! :D
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